Monday, March 2, 2009

Rough Outline and Thesis statement

Thesis Statement: The California budget cuts are careless because it negatively affects schools, deprives benefits from students, and takes away from workers.

  1. The budget cuts negatively affects schools.
  • Takes away funding
  • Less teachers
  • Not able to function as well as before

2. It deprives benefits from students

  • Fewer money given to low income students
  • Fewer scholorships
  • Fewer reasources

3. It takes away from workers

  • Less compensation
  • Some would be out of jobs
  • Fewer benefits

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2 comments:

  1. E M ValdezMarch 3, 2009 at 4:02 PM

    Three possible options here. You are very broad in all aspects. Also you repeat ideas through out the outline. Either write an essay on how it affects workers, students, or teachers. Needs more effort bro.

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  2. Katherine D. HarrisMarch 3, 2009 at 5:08 PM

    Yes, your commenter above is correct. This is very broad and isn't very interesting. What do you want to discuss? what's interesting about this topic for you?

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